Pitch Feedback

This is feedback from our pitch:

2x "Well on the way to Box Office success"

2x "It definitely has potential" 

These are the comments from 'the elements that work are':
Concept
Visuals
Ideology + all fitting together
The powder fight (make sure you get lots of footage of it)
The powder fight sounds amazing will be tough to pull it off
Lots of visuals and lyric relationships
Different idea
Good paint/colour fight at the end
Clear & good intertextual references
Works well

These are the comments from 'things that need developing are':
Get permission from ASDA for trolley sequence
Health & safety check (paint in eye etc.)
Perhaps have 2 'gangs' moving together earlier in video
The trolley part is in the original video , try to put a spin on it?
Trolley idea
Just make sure the powder scene works

These are the comments from 'things that don't work are':
A little too much of the visual relationships with the lyrics








I am really pleased with with the positive feedback and criticisms that we got from our pitch. It seemed that everyone enjoyed it and were positive about our idea. We will be looking into the gangs being in it more as that was our initial idea but it just didn't come through in our storyboard. I think now we will be removing some of the scenes where it is pure narrative and maybe some shots of the band that are in the middle of the song.